Recent advances in air travel have focused only on those sitting in upper class and have left other passengers with no benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
There is no denying the fact that the Latest advances in air trips have focused only on those sitting in first and business class and have left other passengers with no benefits. It is a commonly held belief that those who pay more will get special treatment,
while
others sit in small chairs that will hurt their backbone. There is no argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider, that every airways company should take care of each person on their plane, without discrimination.
To begin
with, The people who are about to purchase their tickets have to communicate with the firm and ask them everything that they want to know.
In other words
, Check if they have all your needs.
In addition
, I would recommend you to search about the seats on the Internet and
also
search for the comments from other experiences.
For example
, in "Tom and The Company" Tom wanted to get a refund for his money
due to
some issues with the company about the seats and the drinks. Another point to consider
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
is every single thing you have heard about the flights ,t buy it because sometimes it could be a lie. It is possible that Some of the lies are true but mostly they aren't.
Moreover
, A lot of people like to destroy their reputations and say stuff which is wrong for many companies
while
the opposite.
Nevertheless
, There
no
Add a missing verb
is no
show examples
reason for what they are doing. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that too many airways are good, and there are
also
the
baddest
Change the word
worst
show examples
, you just have to pick the right one, and the most suitable for you.
Submitted by fnokgamer11 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that the arguments are logically developed. The essay can be more coherent by linking ideas more effectively and including more detailed examples.
task achievement
Your arguments need to be more focused and directly related to the topic. Providing specific examples and evidence can help reinforce your points and make your argumentation stronger.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which provides a good framework for your arguments.
task achievement
You have addressed the topic and provided your opinion on it, which is essential for a Task 2 essay.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: