The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
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The line graph illustrates the amount of people that have travelled to a Caribbean
island
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and divides them into two groups based on their choice of lodging, during the 7-year time period.
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, there is an ongoing upward trend in the total number of visits each period, with the majority staying on the
island
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in comparison to a cruise ship.
Firstly
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, In 2010, travellers who were lodging in the Caribbean started from 0.25
million
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and reached 1
million
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, which was almost double compared to the previous period. The ship users started from 0.75
million
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in the first year in 2010 but had no changes next year in 2011. Over the next three years, the figures for individuals staying on the ship and on the
island
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doubled and reached around 0.5 to 1.5
million
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visitors, respectively.
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, from the year 2013 to 2015 as the number of visitors staying on cruise ships increased dramatically to over a
million
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visitors, the number of travellers stayed on the
island
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equally with approximately 1.5
million
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.
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, in 2017, 3.5
million
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people visited
this
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specific Caribbean
island
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and 2
million
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of these chose to stay on cruise ships
while
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others preferred the
island
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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