You are a famous singer and you have an idea for a new piece in your mind. Send a letter to the composer/producer and persuade them to help you make it.

I am Shaghayegh Shadman; we worked together on
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the "sunshine"
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" piece, which was a massive hit
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last
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music scene. I'm writing
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letter in order to ask you to compose a new
song
for my novel recording which can capture a wider range of audience for both of us.
This
song
has been inspired
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a local couple's love whom I met
last
month throughout my travel to the countryside; in my perspective,
this
piece can be
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of folk and modern music, the issue which can hold diverse music lovers' attention.
Accordingly
,
such
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can be lucrative and rewarding at the same time
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and can make a "wine-wine" occasion for us. In my point of view, our cooperation can lead
this
recording to be nominated for various prizes. I have written the
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of
this
piece during the
last
week; in my mind, you are the most appropriate one who
can
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give a life to
this
song
as our
last
contribution was extremely successful around the world. Our collaboration in
this
recording will make a big impact on people as you are a virtuoso composer who bears strong musical talent and can create incredible works. I keenly looking forward to your response; should any questions arise, make sure you contact me. best regards, Shaghayegh Shadman
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coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence, ensure smoother transitions between ideas. For example, use connective phrases like 'In addition' and 'Moreover.'
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Check for minor grammar and typographical errors to improve clarity and professionalism.
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You provided a clear explanation of your idea and why it would be beneficial for both of you, which adds to the persuasive power of your letter.
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The letter maintains a formal and respectful tone throughout, which is appropriate for a professional request.
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The greeting and closing are polite and effective, framing the content of your letter well.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborate
  • inspiration
  • envision
  • expertise
  • preliminary
  • unique
  • commercial potential
  • artistic growth
  • enthusiastic
  • grateful
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