Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

Some would argue that learning
new
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language
is only needed for
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and
traveling
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,
while
some would say cultural shock and new
friends
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main
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reasons for learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
.
While
learning
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for
job
underpromotion is
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interesting idea,
i
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believe learning
foreign
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language
for new emotions and culture is
best
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thing to do. On the one hand, many people in society see
language
as the perspective to new career growth only. People argue that by the fact that
language
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you
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ways to get high salary
job
,
consequently
, many workers want to study
language
for only that reason. That motivation
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by new availability to get
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new life.
For instance
, in the
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there are many programs provided by international
companiest
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companies
that want new workers with
language
knowledge.
However
,
i
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believe it is not worthwhile to learn
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just for financial
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,as it is
also
better to have some interest
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local culture.
On the other hand
,
foreign
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language
is a key to new
friends
and connections with
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society that can give you
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cultural experience. Because foreign
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societies
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contain interesting
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of view
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life and different
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,new
friends
, new thoughts and ideas will be found there.It is not profitable to just skip down local residents,because they can help you to learn more about local ways to
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there.
For example
, my older brother Nurzhan once
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to India to gain experience in its work
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but ended up learning many things from
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public that gladly provided him
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insights and cultural facts about their country. He met new
friends
and
also
got profit in
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job
,
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because local
friends
helped him by giving him advice for finding
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training company. Because of that , I believe learning
language
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the language
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for a new experience
also
needs to have
place
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with
job
underpromotion interest. In conclusion,
although
studying
new
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language
for work can be
good
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idea,
but
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i
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believe cultural shock
also
will give you as much as
job
interest.
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coherence cohesion
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The essay includes relevant examples to support the points, such as the example of your brother's experience in India.
coherence cohesion
A logical flow of ideas is maintained throughout the essay, and the introduction and conclusion are clearly present.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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