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A friend of yours is thinking about applying for the same course that you did at university. He/she has asked for your advice about studying this subject. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Give details of the course you took at the university Explain why you recommend the university Give some advice about how to apply

#friend #course #university #advice #give #explain
Hello Ahmad ! I hope you are doing well . It's been
such
 a long time since we
last
talk
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. I'm writing
this
 letter to tell you about your concern. You are thinking of doing the same
course
 that I
complete
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completed
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 it few months ago. I want to tell you
few
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a few
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 details about
this
course
 .
This
course
 consists of eight semesters . Each semester carries
the
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 duration of six months. Each semester carries four subjects every time.
At the end
 of each semester,
University
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the University
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 conduct
an exams
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exams
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 for each class. I
recomend
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recommend
you
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apply
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the same
university
of
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 mine because of two main reasons.
Firsty
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First
, all the professors of
this
university
 are well educated ,fully disciplined and ranked on top among other colleges/
university
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.
Secondly
, All the labs are fully
equiped
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equipped
 with modern technology. you will not need to go anywhere for your
asssignments
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assignments
.
While
, some students from other universities need to go second place other than
university
, to
accomplished
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 their targets. Now, I will tell you how to apply
?.
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Initially
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 you have to compile all your documents in a file .
After
this
, you have to visit the
university
 website. Select the same
course
 that you already
knew
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know
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,
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and uploada
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uploada
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upload
 all the required documents in PDF form. I hope you understand my words . yours truly? ahtsham
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task achievement
Try to avoid small grammatical errors such as 'I complete it' which should be 'I completed.' Also, ensure to use consistent tense throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smoother transitions between paragraphs and ideas to enhance overall readability.
coherence cohesion
Break down your points into clear paragraphs for better readability. For example, use separate paragraphs for course details, university recommendation, and application advice.
task achievement
You provided comprehensive details of the course, which addresses the task requirements effectively.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and helpful, which is appropriate for the context of writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
You have shared specific reasons for recommending the university, making your argument convincing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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