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The line graph below shows the household recycling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015.

The line graph below shows the household recycling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015.
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The line graph compares
the
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household recycling in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom,
France
 and
Germany
percentagewise
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from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
, the domestic recycling
rates
 had an upward trend in
UK
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 and
Germany
, with
UK
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 having higher
rates
 than
Germany
.
Whereas
, in
France
, there is an obvious downward trend with a small fluctuation. In
United
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 Kingdom, only one-third of the population was recycling in the year 2005. Between 2005 and 2007, participation in recycling increased to 40%.
Then
 the
rates
 stayed
same
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 until 2009. Household recycling
rates
has
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 gradually risen to the high point of slightly above sixty
percent
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 from 2009 to 2015.
Germany
 showed
similar
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 trend to the UK’s. The percentage was twenty
in
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 the beginning of the period, after that point it grew steadily, reaching around 55%.
On the other hand
, the situation was different in
France
. Almost half of the population recycled in 2005 in
France
. But
then
, the rate
is
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bottomed-out
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, dropping to 30% in 2013
until
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when
rates
has
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declined slowly. Between 2013 and 2015, there was a rapid increase, ending
up
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the period with 40%.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household recycling rates
  • regional
  • line graph
  • countries
  • between
  • overall trends
  • changes
  • compare
  • ten-year period
  • differences
  • reasons
  • summarize
  • comment
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