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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. the past.Do you think this is a positive or negative?

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it is said that in some nations,
people
 have
choosed
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 increasingly to live alone. I think it is a negative phenomenon. Today living alone is becoming a style, and more
people
 tend to it,
while
this
 choice may have a negative impact on their quality of life. When
people
 live alone, they may face many challenges, which cannot solve them without any family support. Financial
problems
is
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 an example of these challenges. Many young
people
as a result
 of skyrocketing housing
price
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prices
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 cannot have their own house, and
not
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 have another choice only live in
a
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 inappropriate house. When individuals live with other family members can be contributed by them. They may share their wealth for having a decent house and
finally
 having a better
life style
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lifestyle
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.
In addition
, today
people
 deal with a lot of
problems
 and require to be
supportted
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supported
 emotionally , in
the
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otherwise
 they may experience mental health
problems
. Family is the best place
which
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 members can share their disappointment and seek
the
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emotional support. When individuals choose
living
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to live
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 alone, they may lose
this
 chance.
This
 leads to the feeling of
lonliness
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loneliness
 and the lack of intimacy.
As a result
, individuals can experience emotional
problems
such
 as stress, anxiety, and even depression.
However
, living alone
have
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 positive effects on
people
such
 as becoming independent, but I think
this
 new trend, which many
people
 in some countries are choosing, has negative effects on their quality of life and
makes
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causes
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 mental health
problems
.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Work on developing a clear logical structure for your arguments. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea followed by supporting details and examples. This will help make your essay easier to follow.
Task Achievement
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General English
Pay attention to your language accuracy and use a wider range of vocabulary and sentence structures. This will enhance the clarity and sophistication of your writing.
Task Achievement
Your introduction clearly states your position regarding the topic, which sets a strong foundation for your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your main points effectively, ensuring that your argument is clear to the reader.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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