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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram below shows us about
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level
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the level
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 of
production
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main
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the main
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 source of Fuel in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom
nearly
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for nearly
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 2 decades
that is
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beetwen
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between
 1981
until
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and
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 2000.
In
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apply
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Overall
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Overall,
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 Petroleum is the most main fuel
to
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apply
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used
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use
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 and
have
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has
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growing
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a growing
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 rate used from 1981 until 2000. Coal is number two in the first
year
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on
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in
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 1991 but
contantly
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constantly
decrease
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decreases
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year
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 by
year
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. Meanwhile Natural gas has
opposite
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the opposite
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 result because of its
used
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apply
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steady
grow
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growth
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. In 1981
production
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 of
Petrolium
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Petroleum
achieve
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achieved
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 almost
on
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apply
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100
million
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tonnes
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 of
oil
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 and
more
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apply
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higher until 140
miilion
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million
tonnes
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 of
oil
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 in 1986 ,
this
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production
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continue
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continued
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 stable until 2000 .
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However
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However,
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 the
production
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 has
anomali
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anomaly
 in 1991 which down to 100
million
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tonnes
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 of
oil
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 that
year
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. Coal
production
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levek
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level
levels
start
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started
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 at 80
million
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level
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 in
the
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apply
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1981 and significantly
decrease
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decreased
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 below 40
million
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tonnes
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 of
oil
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 in 2000.
In
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On
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other
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the other
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 hand , Natural gas
that has
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had
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 the lowest
production
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level
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 in 1981 , slightly
increase
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increased
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their
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its
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 energy unit
level
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of
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by
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 manufacturing over 100
million
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tonnes
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 of
oil
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 in 2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words level, production, year, million, tonnes, oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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