Today more and more rourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult,such as the Sahara desert or the antartics. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such palces?
Recently,
the
number of tourists keep growing are visiting places where conditions are extreme,Correct article usage
a
such
as the Sahara desert or the antartics
.Correct your spelling
antarctic
antics
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essay Will discuss about
the benefits and drawbacks of visiting difficult Remove the preposition
apply
place
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places
such
as antartics
.
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Antarctica
antarctic
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is Correct your spelling
Antarctica
the
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apply
coldest
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the coldest
place
in the world.Fix the agreement mistake
places
only
a few people live there,Capitalize word
Only
due to
the wether
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weather
are
extreme.Change the verb form
is
firstly
,the benefits with live
in Change preposition
of living
antartics
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Antarctica
antarctic
is
,Correct subject-verb agreement
are
we
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the condition
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conditions
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visitors
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from very extreme Fix the agreement mistake
hackers
wether
,Correct your spelling
weather
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besides
for
prevent Change preposition
to
hyportemia
,we can Correct your spelling
hyperemia
hypothermia
cooking
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cook
food
such
as soup and noodle.we can see the stunning views from antartics
at night,there Correct your spelling
the antics
also
we can see Aurora at midnight.
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,effect
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the effect
the
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of the
wether
from antartics
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antarctic
Antarctica
healt
,Correct your spelling
health
particullary
our Correct your spelling
particularly
lung
,caused Fix the agreement mistake
lungs
bye
extreme Correct your spelling
by
wether
in Correct your spelling
weather
antartics
.Correct your spelling
Antarctica
antarctic
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that,Change preposition
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food
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traders
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which
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of
antartics
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Antarctica
antarctic
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to
storm
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storms
antartics
,and we should prepare Correct your spelling
Antarctica
antarctic
our self
from Correct your spelling
ourselves
storm
by sheltering indoors and providing Add an article
the storm
a storm
food
to survive the storm,that is
drawbacks from antartics
if tourists want to Correct your spelling
antarctic
Antarctica
visited
.
In conclusion,if the tourists want to Change the verb
visit
going
to Change the verb form
go
antartics
,they should Correct your spelling
Antarctica
antarctic
preparing
equipment, ingredients Change the verb form
prepare
be preparing
food
,healthy
,and mental for the extreme Replace the word
health
wether
there.Correct your spelling
weather
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introduction
The introduction should clearly state the topic and purpose of the essay. Consider rephrasing the first sentence to make it clearer. For example, 'Recently, the number of tourists visiting extreme conditions like the Sahara Desert or Antarctica has been growing.'
cohesion
Use appropriate linking words and phrases to connect ideas and paragraphs. For example, you might use 'Furthermore,' 'Moreover,' or 'In addition' to introduce new points.
coherence
Be more consistent in maintaining a clear structure throughout the essay. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea, supported by relevant details and examples.
language use
Use a variety of sentence structures and vocabulary to make your argument more compelling and engaging.
task achievement
The essay correctly identifies and addresses both the benefits and drawbacks of visiting places like Antarctica.
conclusion
The conclusion appropriately summarizes the main points and offers a recommendation for tourists.
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