It is generally believed that some people are born with talents, for instance sport or music, and others are not. however, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person. discuss both views and give your opinion
There is an inconclusive debate about whether talents,
such
as sports or music, are natural abilities or learning skills
.Both of these views will be outlined in detail before the conclusion is reached.
The fact that people
are born with different potentials is undeniable.Some of
professional sports players or famous musicians are born with Change preposition
apply
skills
beyond the standard level.For example
,Taylor Swift who is a famous American singer discovered her musical skills
when she was just a child and pursued her career since then
without distraction to other career paths ,so it can be said that she had a gift to become an entertainer.Additionally
,there will require more times
if Fix the agreement mistake
time
people
want to be trained in the area they are not have
an inborn ability than Change the verb form
do not have
people
who are born with it.
On the other hand
,Natural talents solely
Rephrase
alone
is
not the only key to success ,for repetitive training programs are Change the verb form
are
also
vital.In other words
,athletes with high potential cannot represent countries in the Olympic games without dedicating their own personal time to numerous hours of practicing
.Change the spelling
practising
This
clearly can be seen from the news behind Correct article usage
the olympic's
olympic's
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Olympic's
players
success,sacrificing their teenage time in order to achieve their Change to a genitive case
player's
players'
goal
.Fix the agreement mistake
goals
Moreover
, scientific research found that human
brain Correct article usage
the human
have
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has
tendency
to develop if Add an article
a tendency
the tendency
people
spend time on that field more than 10,000 hours.
To summarize,Not only skills
are congenital,but also
constant discipline is important component for people
who have a desire to be top of their field.From my point of view,Discovering your suitable skills
and improving in that area is the key to success.Submitted by chawanat.pla on
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task achievement
While your essay covers both sides of the argument well, there could be a bit more elaboration and examples added to strengthen your argument. Some relevant examples are present, but more specific examples could enhance the overall response.
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introduction conclusion present
Your introduction effectively sets up the discussion, and the conclusion provides a strong closure by summarizing your viewpoints.
supported main points
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Your opinion
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