The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.

The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
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the percentage of people in the United Kingdom eating fruit and vegetables at the recommended level in the
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2002, 2006 and 2010, divided into 3 categories.
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, the highest consumption is contributed by
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women in the
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2006.
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, children in the
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contributed to the lowest percentage in 2002.
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females stood at 25% in the
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2002 and
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peaked at 32% four years later, before reducing slightly to 27% in the
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period.
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, men in the
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consumed fruit and vegetables at 22% in the first
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, it experienced a minimal decline at 24% in 2010, after hitting a high of 28% in the previous four years. Moving to the remaining categories, having consumed the least fruit and vegetables, children led in
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consumption across the periods. It started at 11% in 2002
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reached a peak of 16% in the
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2006. In the following four years, the figure exhibited a negligible drop at 14% in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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