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The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table provides how many quantities of local harvest and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia between 2004 and 2014. As can be seen from the table, the figures of local catches surpassed the imports.
In addition
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, the total
number
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present
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presents
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a
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an
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 increasing trend in the
ten
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ten-year
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years
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 period.
Firstly
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, the
number
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 of local catches grew from 2677.7 metric
tons
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 in 2004 to its peak
at
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of
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 8136.2 metric
tons
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 in 2008.
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, it started to fall afterwards, from 7844.9 metric
tons
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 in 2009 to 5031.9 metric
tons
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 in 2014. The figure for imported fresh fish had a more obvious fluctuation, The
number
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were
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 below 1000 metric
tons
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 for the first four
years
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.
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,
commencing
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it continued
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 to climb
from
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in
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 2009 and reached its highest point at 1227.3 metric
tons
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 in 2012. The
number
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 of total fresh fish
harvest
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harvested
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 grew steadily for six
years
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 from 3142.2 metric
tons
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 to 8949 metric
tons
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, and
then
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 it fell for the following four
years
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. In brief, the numbers
overall
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 increased in the ten
years
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, years, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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