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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps illustrate the transformation of Porth
Harbour
 in its current condition and 20 years ago.
Overall
, it is evident that some of the infrastructures were relocated like marina and fishing boats throughout the period, and
consequently
 some features were added
such
 as cafes and shops. In terms of the infrastructure, a marina was the place for private yachts located
the
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north of the road swapped with fishing boats. In 2000, if there was only one dock to serve passenger ferries, one additional dock was added in Porth
Harbour
. To access the car park, the road has already been relocated to the east of the main road. Regarding the facilities in
the
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Porth
Harbour
, the castle that was established 20 years ago, transformed into a hotel.
Additionally
, the public beach near the castle
also
 became a private beach for the hotel.
Lastly
,
besides
 the car park, more showers and toilets are built to accommodate people that come to the
harbour
.
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The essay offers clear comparisons and effectively summarises the main transformations.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-organized, following a logical structure throughout.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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