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Some people that competition at work, at school and daily life is good things. Other believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

#people #competition #work #school #life
Nowadays, it is argued that the only solution to increase recycling from household waste is the duty of the government to regulate
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the
law
. Personally,
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I agree
 with
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 idea because
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the most effective method is making it a legal requirement. laws are required for economic growth and
people
 tend to follow the rules when it is a
law
due to
 First of all, Normally, daily life activities create an enormous amount of
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garbage garbage
,
such
 as plastic,
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glass glasses
, and
paperpapers
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paper papers
.
However
, only a few
people
 realize that they should reuse some products in
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order to prevent them from destroying natural
resorches
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resources
.
For example
, when
people
 finish drinking water, they can easily recycle their leftovers by using them again and again. …….. economic ?
This
 method is not only an environmentally
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 process but
also
 helps economic growth rapidly
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.
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leftovers
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 recycling
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 less popular among
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mankind
.
In other words
, without legal enforcement, it is possible to control
people
’s behaviour.
Therefore
 it is necessary for federal authorities to regulate the
law
 which involves
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prokoving
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promoting
 awareness of household waste
recycle
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.
Secondly
,
Moreover
, when
government
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the government
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 take serious action in regulating the recycling
law
, it always
bring
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 out precious outcomes. Because
people
 tend to abide by the
law
 concerning the punishment rather than
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the realization
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 of the environmental problems.
For instance
, many years ago in Thailand, governments used to
fine
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 for littering in public places and
people
 who broke the
law
 repeatedly…..
As a result
, the pavement
were
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 clean at that time.
Last
 but not least, it is an effective way to culminate
environmental
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 conservative behaviours among
people
 not only in
this
 generation
,
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 but
also
 in the later ones. In conclusion,
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I
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 strongly agree with using the
law
 as a tool for increasing
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the household
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 waste
recycle
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recycling
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 process.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • outperform
  • advancements
  • academic standards
  • work ethic
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • unhealthy rivalries
  • harmonious
  • supportive
  • collaborative learning
  • social skills
  • communication skills
  • sense of community
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