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Some people believe that sport is an essential part of school life for children, while others feel it should be purely optional. Discuss these opposing views and give your own opinion.

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Sport
 continues to be a controversial topic, especially regarding
children
. On the one hand, some people think that
sport
 is so important for
children
 that it should be part of their
school
lives
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.
Firstly
, they believe that doing physical activity is good for
children
’s health as it is a way to prevent obesity, a common issue nowadays.
In addition
, playing together in
sports
such
 as football and volleyball may be an opportunity for
children
 to create new relationships and learn to work in
team
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. Doing
sports
 at
school
 is
also
 seen as a funny moment
among
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 lectures.
On the other hand
, others believe that
sport
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sports
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 in
school
 should be an option. The first reason is
connecting
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 to the fact that a lot of
children
 already do
sports
 in their free time. Adding activity during
school
 hours is seen as a waste of time which could be better spent on academic subjects.
Moreover
,
children
 who are not good at
sports
 could experience a sense of exclusion and become insecure.
Overall
, I believe that doing
sport
 in the youth is important both for physical and
behavior
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 reasons. When I was I child I had always done
sport
 after
school
 but despite that I used to enjoy doing
sports
 with my classmates. I saw it as a moment to socialize, talk and have fun together. I believe
that is
 important for the teacher not to create a competitive climate among
children
 so that everyone
could
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 enjoy the game without
felling
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feeling
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judge
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 by
the
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apply
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others. The teacher should
also
 give a range to choose from, to ensure
children
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children's
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 interest is high. The positive effect on
children
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children's
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 mental and physical development outweighs the negatives.
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