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The graph below shows electricity production (in terawatt hours) in Franch between 1980 and 2012.

The graph below shows electricity production (in terawatt hours) in Franch between 1980 and 2012.
The graph compares four different sources used to produce
electricity
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 in France from 1980 to 2012. Units measured in terawatt
hours
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 (TW-h).
Overall
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, nuclear
energy
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 was the most popular source used to generate
electricity
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 over the thirty-two-year
period
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,
while
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 renewable
energy
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 was rarely used for the same purpose. In 1980, thermal
energy
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 was the most used source, producing about 125
terawtt
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terawatt
hours
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 of
electricity
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.
This
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 was rapidly surpassed by nuclear
energy
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 about a year later, becoming the
dominent
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dominant
 source of
electricity
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 by 1981.
Electricity
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 generation from nuclear
energy
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 continued to dominate over the given
period
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, peaking in 2006 at around 425 TW-h. In the meantime, electric generation from thermal sources continued to drop from 1980 until 1988, when its use fluctuated around 50
terawatt
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terawatt-hours
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hours
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thereafter
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. There were hardly any changes in the use of hydroelectric and renewable
energy
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 over the
period
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.
Electricity
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 produced from renewables
were
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 close to zero until 2006 were it started to minimally rise peaking at approximately 25TW-h in 2012.
On the other hand
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,
electricity
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 generated from hydroelectric sources maintained stability over the
period
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 at around 60 terawatt
hours
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, hours, energy, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • terawatt hours
  • nuclear sources
  • non-nuclear sources
  • period
  • overall growth
  • peaks
  • declines
  • plateaus
  • trends
  • general trends
  • notable changes
  • increase/decrease
  • stable
  • capacity
  • fluctuations
  • production sources
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