Aircrafts have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetable to some countries where such plants hardly grow or out of season. Some people consider it a good idea but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is often argued that
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some people believe that
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the use
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of
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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in
transportation
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the transportation
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of goods like
fruit
and
vegetable
is important
while
others think it is purposeless to use
aircrafts
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.I agree with the statement that
Aircraft
is a
sourceful
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resourceful
way of
transportation
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transporting
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of
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fruit
and
vegetable
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vegetables
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.In
this
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will discuss both
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views
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with
the
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relevent
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relevant
examples. On the one hand ,
poeple
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people
argue that
vegetable
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vegetables
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and
fruit
should be transported
through
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by
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aircrafts
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aircraft
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,
this
is
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because
,
Aircraft
is a very fast way of
tranportation
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transportation
in our modern
tecnologies
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technologies
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therefore
vegetable
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vegetables
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and
fruite
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fruit
fruits
can be
tranported
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transported
in a very
shot
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short
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period of time without
decaing
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decaying
especially
non seasonal
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fruit
and
vegetable
that are rotten easily .For
exaplme
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example
,
mangeos
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mangoes
managers
mangos
are
transpoted
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transported
to
USA
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the USA
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by
aircraft
from
pakistan
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beacuse
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because
the
envirnment
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environment
is not suitable
to grow
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for growing
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them there.
On the other hand
,some people are the
opponent
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opponents
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that it is fruitless to utilize
Aircraft
as a
mean
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means
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of transporting
fruit
and vegetables.
firstly
it will
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on
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the economy of
country
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the country
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.
secondly
, the quality of
fruit
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fruits
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and
vegetable
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vegetables
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will impact the interest of people that
why
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is why
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fruit
and
vegetble
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vegetable
vegetables
should not be allowed to
transport
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be transported
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in
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to
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others country
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other countries
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through
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by
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Aircraft
.
For instance
, a study has shown
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%
of
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decline in
economy
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the economy
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of
pakistan
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Pakistan
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while
using
Aircraft
in
transpoting
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transporting
fruit
and
vegetable
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vegetables
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.
Additionally
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many other sources can be used
such
as ships .
To conclude
,
however
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however,
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it is highly costable to
us
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use
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Aircraft
but
i
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I
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agree with
this
statement that it is beneficial to use
Aircraft
as a
mean
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means
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of transporting
fruit
and
vegetable
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vegetables
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.
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Your response to the task is generally clear and addresses both views. However, improve the clarity of your arguments and ensure they are comprehensive. Try to avoid run-on sentences and punctuation errors, which can cause confusion.
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The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, with main points relatively well-supported by examples.
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You have included relevant specific examples, making your argument more convincing and grounded.
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