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Air tranport is increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to other countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. Some people say this is good but other believe the use air transport for this purpose is not justified. Discuss both veiws and give your opinion.

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In the present climate, air transportation has gained momentum in the
food
 industry.
Although
 some claim that airports can be used in transferring nutrients, many others believe that
this
 approach is not a suitable technique. I hold the latter mindset strongly as other ways can be used. On the one hand, opponents of exporting
food
 by means of airports opine that the governments can take advantage of some substitutes.
For instance
, they can use new farming methods vertical-farming,
for example
. Through
this
 cultivation, the crop will not be affected by climate change conducive to a sufficient
food
 supply.
Thus
, the money
that is
 consumed transportation of
food
 can be dedicated to modern farming methods. Not only are These techniques more effective in terms of the quality of the
food
 but
also
 it may be more cost-effective. I have a robust stance in favour of the mentioned view. I believe considering air dromes as tools for commodity exchange is an infallible precursor to environmental detriments exacerbating the greenhouse effect. To illustrate, toxic gases
such
 as CO2 or sulphur stemming from
airplane
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 fuel can deteriorate air pollution.
On the other hand
, proponents of airport transport posit that it is for the governments of wealthy territories to assist the deprived ones in demanding conditions. They contend that airlines can be the most practical way in terms of pace.
Moreover
, modern farming needs an initial investment and a qualified workforce
otherwise
 it will not be operational.
For instance
, residents of Sybria whose weather pattern is extremely cold and is not cultivable, would not survive unless they are provided with sufficient nutrients imported from other areas.
However
, I disapprove of
this
 view as with
a
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proper management
this
 issue can be dealt with. In conclusion, there are some emergencies that need
food
 transportation via airline,
whereas
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 my point of view, these situations can be rendered to insignificance with the help of sufficient investment.
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grammar
Work on grammatical accuracy, such as correcting 'opponents of exporting food by means of airports' to 'opponents of exporting food by air transport' and 'new farming methods vertical-farming' to 'new farming methods, such as vertical-farming'.
word choice
Clarify any vague terms and ensure consistency in terminology, such as using 'air transport' instead of alternating between 'airports' and 'air dromes'.
proofreading
Proofread to correct minor errors, such as 'airports can be used in transferring nutrients' which might be better as 'airports can be used for transporting food' and 'air dromes as tools for commodity exchange' could be better as 'air transport as a means for food exchange'.
structure
You provided a clear introduction and conclusion, which framed the essay well.
task response
The essay covers both viewpoints comprehensively, with relevant examples and supportive arguments.
coherence
You effectively used a logical structure to present your points, making it easy for the reader to follow your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Global supply chain
  • Perishable goods
  • Food miles
  • Culinary diversity
  • Seasonal produce
  • Environmental implications
  • Ecological footprint
  • Renewable energy sources
  • Green technology
  • Supply and demand
  • Affordability
  • Out-of-season
  • Global warming
  • Air freight
  • Locavore
  • Seasonal eating
  • Technological advancements
  • Sustainable practices
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