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The charts below gives information about levels of education in Glasgow, a city in Scotland in 2010.

The charts below gives information about levels of education in Glasgow, a city in Scotland in 2010.
#information #levels #education #glasgow #city #scotland
The bar chart despite the information on the proportion of
citizen’s
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citizens’
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education
 levels in Glasgow, Scotland average by age in 2010. The pie charts illustrate the percentage of
education
 degrees of all citizens and the average by gender in 2010.
It is clear that
 the percentage of citizens who graduate with a high degree was the highest average for 16-50
years
.
While
 the proportion of men’s
education
 levels was higher than women's in 2010. In 2010, The figure of
people
 who had high
degree
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degrees
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 in
school
 certificates and university degrees averaged 16-50
years
 old around 91%. the number of
people
 aged 24-35 was
graduate
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graduated
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 from university
the
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was the
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 highest around 76% more than 16-24 and 35-50 by 5%. The percentage of
school
 certificates
were
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 around 15 per cent in 24-35
years
 old and 20 per cent in 16-24 and 35-50
years
 old respectively.
In contrast
, the figure for
education
 levels of elderly
people
 (50-75) experienced 70% of
people
 who study over than
school
 certificate. And the oldest
people
 study only 28%. The proportion of men
education
 degree was highest than women. Male
people
 graduate from university around 32%.
And both
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 males and females graduated with
school
 certificates with the same figure
around
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 33%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, years, people, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • educational levels
  • qualifications
  • higher education
  • school level qualifications
  • no qualifications
  • proportions
  • notable trends
  • outliers
  • age demographics
  • economic conditions
  • social policies
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