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The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect products

The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect products
the map illustrates some information about eating
insect
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product
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products
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 and
percentage
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the percentage
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 of global willingness.
overall
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, eating insects
are
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is
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 favorable in
American
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the American
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 continent rather than Asia because two countries located in
American
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the American
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 continent are more than 50%
while
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 there is one
countries
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country with
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 more than 50% willingness in the East ,
beside
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and
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 all ten nations are below
of
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apply
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50%. Mexico has
first
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a first
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 place for eating
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insect
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insects
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by
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at
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 71%
while
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Japon
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Japan
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 bears the
least
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lowest
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 rate
by
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at
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 21%,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 Thailand in the East and
Pero
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Peru
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 in the West are approximately
same
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the same
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by
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at
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 57% and China and Brazil have similar
percentage
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percentages
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by
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at
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 44 %.
coountries
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Countries
 located in the South including AUstralia and South Africa like countries located in the North
such
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 as
USA
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the USA
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,
UK
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the UK
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, Spain,
Russia
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and Russia
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 have less
intrest
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interest
to eat
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in eating
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insect
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insects
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 because
rate
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the rate
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 of eating
insect
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product
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products
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 are less than 40%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words insect with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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