Demand of food is increasing worldwide. What are the causes of this? What measures can the international community take to make sure the food supply is enough?

Nowadays, we can see the
unsufficient
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amount of
food
besides
the increase of
a
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consumption all over the
world
. I think
,
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it
have
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been caused by several reasons.
This
essay will discuss the main reasons for
this
phenomen
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phenomenon
and propose some possible solutions to avoid them. First and foremost, I'd like to talk about the paramount reason for the increase
food
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demand - uncontrolled population growth. With the development of medicine, we are witnesses
of
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the birth explosion
in
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the one hand, and the
expantion
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expansion
of
the
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life expectancy
in
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the other hand.
Moreover
, now we have an interesting
phenomen
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phenomenon
- a lot of children and
elderies
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elderly
, that need
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support, and a thin layer of working people.
Secondly
, we can talk about the
expantion
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expansion
of the city area and
decrease
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the decrease
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of the
farmers
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farmer's
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area. It's not profitable nowadays to be a farmer. So, we have
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less
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supply of
a
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farmer production.
Furthermore
, the second cause of diminished
food
supply
are
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nature
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disasters.
Huricans
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Hurricanes
, tornados,
and
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fires, and drought have a huge influence on a harvest all over the
world
. For
instanse
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instance
,
the
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hot countries like Israel, which
has
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an essential problem with the water for agriculture,
has
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a lot of fires in summer, and it
increase
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a
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harvest. In conclusion, as one of the
solution
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of
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the
problem
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we can think about
the
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birth control, but
this
point of view is opposite to main
world
religions, so it's not a possibility. That's why I
convinced
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that the
worlr
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world
governments have to elaborate the
World
Harvest Program to improve the situation with the
food
supply. They need to include, mostly, the budget to reward farming and
researching
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in
this
field of
sciences
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.
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