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The diagram shows how tea leaves are processed into five tea types. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows how tea leaves are processed into five tea types. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The listed diagram depicts the manufacturing process, describing a series of 4 to 6 phases through which harvested
tea
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 leaves are made as five kinds of
tea
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, consisting of
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 cultivating, pulling, withering, steaming, rolling, demolishing, fermentation procedure, and evaporating leaves in an oven. If we take all types of
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 in combination,
it is clear that
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 the easiest method in terms of processing is white
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 which comprises solely four stages
while
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 other sorts of
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, namely, green
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, oolong
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,
large
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leaf
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 black
tea
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, and small
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 black
tea
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 embrace six steps. In order to produce all types of the listed
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, the
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leaf
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 needs to be grown followed by the plucking process as a 2nd step,
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 it needs to be wilt. In stark contrast to the other kinds of
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, the white
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 undergoes only putting the moisture out in an oven for the
further
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 step. Regarding the procedure of the remaining sorts,
small
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leaf
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 black
tea
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 and
large
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leaf
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 black
tea
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 are exposed to crushing and rolling means,
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 go through the full fermentation, and go
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the steaming out.
However
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, oolong
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 requires only a modest fermentation as a fifth step with prior rolling experience to go drying in the oven later.
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, green
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 demands
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 6 stages, and goes through
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steaming, rolling, and drying for the 4, 5, and 6 stages, respectively.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, leaf with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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