Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self- employed?
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essay will discuss both aspects.
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increases their income. Correct word choice
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For example
, research conducted at Harvard University in 2010 showed that the income of self-employed individuals was 45% more than a traditional employee.
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on the other hand
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self-employment
poses various negative consequences to societies. Use synonyms
One
of them is being less sociable. employers who work independently lack a professional environment and tend to be more isolated which may affect their emotions and cause resentment. Use synonyms
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jobs
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jobs
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time
. If self-workers cannot find any opportunity, they will lose their financial support. Use synonyms
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To conclude
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Although
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introduction
You should refine the introduction to clearly state that you will argue both sides before taking a definite stance in the conclusion. This will make your position more explicit from the start.
evidence
The use of examples like the Harvard research is good, but make sure that all examples are seamlessly integrated into the point you're making. Sometimes examples can feel like they are just 'added on' rather than a cohesive part of your argument.
grammar
There are some minor grammatical errors and word choice issues (e.g., "self-employment" should be capitalized at the beginning of sentences, "employers" vs. "employees"). Pay attention to these as they affect the overall clarity of your essay.
coherence
Your essay is well-organized, and you have managed to cover both aspects of the argument effectively within the limited word count.
evidence
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conclusion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the arguments discussed and ties the essay together, providing a clear ending.
Your opinion
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