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Some claim That studying abroad has great benefits for student's home country. To extent agree or disagree.

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Some people say that it is advantageous for
students
 in the countryside to study outside of their country. I completely agree with
this
 opinion because I believe that studying abroad gives
students
 the opportunity to learn new things that they can not find in their hometown. First of all, studying in
foreign
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 country can make people feel independent and allow them to pursue what they truly want to learn. In some countries, like Thailand, there is a strong belief that graduating with a bachelor's degree is essential for securing a
high wage
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 job.
However
, in other countries, individuals may not need
such
 a high degree to apply for well-paid work. Learning from different educational systems can expose
students
 to diverse views and opportunities unavailable at home.
Secondly
, studying abroad is the best way to experience new cultures and traditions firsthand. Every country has its own unique culture, Europe
for instance
 boasts diverse languages, cuisine styles,
stunning
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 landscapes that are not similar to Asia’s cultural backdrop with no book or internet source fully conveyed. Some nations even offer exchange programs that allow under
18 year olds
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18-year-olds
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 to live with host families who are willing to share and support for short and long-term stays,
thus
 enabling young learners to adapt
various
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 lifestyles beyond parental comfort zones back home
while
 exploring beautiful destinations simultaneously.
For instance
, I am certain children who have a chance to live overseas develop better life skills compared to those solely reliant on domestic upbringing within a familiar environment supported by parents alone. In conclusion, studying abroad undeniably benefits rural
students
 equipping them with a broader understanding of the world, enhancing personal
professional
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 growth immeasurably valuable experiences gained far outweigh
limitations
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the limitations
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 imposed by staying in the local environment.
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