The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what are the possible solutions?
The way in which information is circulated has been completely transformed by the
internet
but this
has also
created issues we never had before. However
, several solutions that we can adopt to remedy the situation will be outlined in this
essay.
The proliferation of the internet
brings in its wake problems in the form of çyberbullying and manipulation
. With regard to the former, social media can be used to spread lies and rumors
to thousands of people in an instant, and the invasive nature of Change the spelling
rumours
this
type of bullying means that there is simply no way for the victim to escape it. In addition
, there is hardly any regulation on what type of information can be put on the internet
, which means that malicious people can use it to their advantage. This
can be seen in the way the Trump administration won the US presidential election, in large part, by running ads on social media like Facebook.
To address these problems they should be, first and foremost, brought to the fore. This
can be done by mounting awareness campaigns about the problems associated with using the internet
, especially cyberbullying. Celebrities who are trusted by the public can also
help spread the message on their platform, for example
by talking about what psychological distress a bullied person may have to endure. The problem of manipulation
seems difficult to tackle because introducing legislation to check the content of say social media posts and adverts is in itself a form of manipulation
as deciding what is illegal is almost entirely subjective and tantamount to taking away the freedom of speech.
In conclusion, the fact that we now consume and share information almost exclusively on the internet
has led to an increase in the number of incidents of cyberbullying and manipulation
, and a viable measure would he in awareness* raising campaigns However
, it is decidedly difficult to address these conundrums holistically.Submitted by lenam2k1 on
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task achievement
You have addressed the task prompt well by identifying and explaining the problems associated with the Internet, such as cyberbullying and manipulation. You also offered some potential solutions to these problems. However, you should add more depth and variation in your arguments to fully address the complexity of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Improving logical connections between your main points and expanding the explanations can enhance the flow. For instance, explicitly linking how awareness campaigns specifically combat cyberbullying could strengthen coherence.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, main body paragraphs, and a conclusion. There is good use of transitional phrases to connect the ideas smoothly.
task achievement
You have included relevant examples, such as the reference to the Trump administration's use of social media ads during the US presidential elections, to support your points.
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