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The line graph bellow shows information about avareage price on homes in thre countries from 1997 to 2014

The line graph bellow shows information about avareage price on homes in thre countries from 1997 to 2014
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The line graph provides data about
middle
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the middle
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 prices of
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
 in three countries from 1997 to 2014.
Overall
, it can be seen that through decades monopolies A and B showed
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a signifficant
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signifficant
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significant
 increase,
while
 country C remained
steadily
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.
To begin
 with, in 1997 the price
on
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of
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 flats was a hundred
dollars
 in Country C. There was a considerable increase to 250
dollars
 in 2007. In the next
year
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year,
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 It decreased to just under 250 and
come
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came
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 back to 250 in 2009.
Then
 It remained
steadily
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steady
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 until the end. In the monopoly B,
price
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the price
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on
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of
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 flats was just under 100
dollars
. It increased rapidly to 300 in 2005. It
has
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experienced a crash to just over 250 in 2008 and
increadable
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incredible
 growth to 500 and
continue
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continued
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 to be stable until 2014
On the contrary
,
price
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the price
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on
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of
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 houses in
the
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apply
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country A was just over 100
dollars
 from 1997 to 2000. It has experienced an
increadable
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incredible
 growth to just over 500
dollars
 in 2003.
Then
, there was a drop to just under 500 in the next three years. It
race
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raced
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signifficantly
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significantly
 to 600 in 2009 and
continue
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continued
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 to be consistent until 2014. e
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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