Some people from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficult to get a university education. Universities should make it easier for such groups to enrol. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some
people
from poor and rural backgrounds find it challenging to attend the
Correct article usage
apply
university
, therefore
, universities should give them more opportunities to enroll
. I totally agree with Change the spelling
enrol
this
statement.
To begin
with, nowadays university
education is crucial
requirement to Add an article
a crucial
registered
for employment and most students usually Change the form of the verb
register
face
with Wrong verb form
faced
the
competition. One significant reason, which Correct article usage
apply
make
Change the verb form
makes
people
from poor family's
Change the noun form
families
family
did
not have a Wrong verb form
do
change
Correct your spelling
chance
for attending
Change preposition
to attend
the
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apply
university
is tuition fees, that
Correct word choice
which
people
with lower income
cannot afford it. Fix the agreement mistake
incomes
For example
, Brisbane university
has accepted my friend and gave him a scholarship for his entire semester, Capitalize word
University
however
, his family cannot sent
him to Australia because the tickets for transportation cost too high. Change the verb form
send
be sent
Moreover
, the competition of all students around the world might be difficult for poor students because of the lack of educations
.
Fix the agreement mistake
education
Furthermore
, the college should make more easier and convenient
for them to Correct quantifier usage
more convenient
enroll
Change the spelling
enrol
such
as give
them a scholarship if they have Wrong verb form
by giving
a good average degrees
, when in Correct the article-noun agreement
a good average degree
good average degrees
the
high school. One main solution is Correct article usage
apply
provide
more learning lessons on several functions to give them Fix the infinitive
to provide
less decision
to choose the right Fix the agreement mistake
fewer decisions
university
because they can study at home, instead
of the university
, and it suit
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suits
for
poor Change preposition
apply
people
, which reducing
unnecessary aspects. Wrong verb form
reduces
For instance
, during COVID-19
pandemic, Correct article usage
the COVID-19
university
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universities
have
to change their learning lesson Wrong verb form
had
into
online, Change preposition
apply
consequently
, when it ended, people
actually thought that it
comfortable for them. Add a verb
it is
it was
In addition
, it depends on how they manage it, and their goals for reaching the university
.
In conclusion, I believe that universities should make it easier for people
from rural background
to Fix the agreement mistake
backgrounds
registered
Wrong verb form
register
,
and only concentrate on their knowledge.Remove the comma
apply
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