Some people from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficult to get a university education. Universities should make it easier for such groups to enrol. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
from poor and rural backgrounds find it challenging to attend
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university
,
therefore
, universities should give them more opportunities to
enroll
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. I totally agree with
this
statement.
To begin
with, nowadays
university
education is
crucial
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requirement to
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for employment and most students usually
face
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with
the
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competition. One significant reason, which
make
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people
from poor
family's
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families
family
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did
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not have a
change
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chance
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for attending
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to attend
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the
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university
is tuition fees,
that
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which
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people
with lower
income
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incomes
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cannot afford it.
For example
, Brisbane
university
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University
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has accepted my friend and gave him a scholarship for his entire semester,
however
, his family cannot
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him to Australia because the tickets for transportation cost too high.
Moreover
, the competition of all students around the world might be difficult for poor students because of the lack of
educations
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education
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.
Furthermore
, the college should make more easier and
convenient
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more convenient
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for them to
enroll
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such
as
give
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by giving
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them a scholarship if they have
a good average degrees
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a good average degree
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, when in
the
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high school. One main solution is
provide
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more learning lessons on several functions to give them
less decision
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fewer decisions
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to choose the right
university
because they can study at home,
instead
of the
university
, and it
suit
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suits
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for
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poor
people
, which
reducing
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reduces
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unnecessary aspects.
For instance
, during
COVID-19
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the COVID-19
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pandemic,
university
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universities
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have
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to change their learning lesson
into
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online,
consequently
, when it ended,
people
actually thought that
it
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it is
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comfortable for them.
In addition
, it depends on how they manage it, and their goals for reaching the
university
. In conclusion, I believe that universities should make it easier for
people
from rural
background
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backgrounds
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to
registered
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register
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,
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apply
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and only concentrate on their knowledge.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Equal opportunity
  • Diversity
  • Underrepresented groups
  • Financial constraints
  • Scholarships
  • Quota systems
  • Preparatory courses
  • Outreach programs
  • Academic standards
  • Tokenism
  • Reverse discrimination
  • Impoverished
  • Rural areas
  • Enrollment policies
  • Non-profit organizations
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