The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
The line graph illustrates the frequency of visiting from abroad to a certain Caribbean
island
over the time period from 2010 and 2017.
Overall
, both figures had developed a positive trend in terms of the visits from abroad to
this
Caribbean
island
.
Firstly
, the number of tourists that chose their accommodation on the
island
had
initially
increased to 0.5
millions
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between 2010 to 2011, but
then
it fell back to roughly 0.25
millions
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in the following year.
Nonetheless
, since 2012 more travelers have started to lodge on the
island
,
the
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figure has steadily risen from 0.25 to 1.25
millions
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.
On the other hand
, it is evident that the
amount
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of foreigners that had selected to stay overnight on the cruise ships was consistently higher than that of staying on the
island
until 2016,
where
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when
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less
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people
consider
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renting a cruise ship. Between 2010 to 2013,
this
figure had gone up from 0.25 to 1.5
millions
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at a stable rate.
However
, it
had
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level
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off
from
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2013 and
eventually
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it had a slight decrease.
Nevertheless
, the number went back to 1.5 million.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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