The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
The line graph illustrates the frequency of visiting from abroad to a certain Caribbean
island
over the time period from 2010 and 2017.
Overall
, both figures had developed a positive trend in terms of the visits from abroad to this
Caribbean island
.
Firstly
, the number of tourists that chose their accommodation on the island
had initially
increased to 0.5 millions
between 2010 to 2011, but Change to singular
million
then
it fell back to roughly 0.25 millions
in the following year. Change to singular
million
Nonetheless
, since 2012 more travelers have started to lodge on the island
, the
figure has steadily risen from 0.25 to 1.25 Correct word choice
and the
millions
.
Change to singular
million
On the other hand
, it is evident that the amount
of foreigners that had selected to stay overnight on the cruise ships was consistently higher than that of staying on the Change the quantifier
number
island
until 2016, where
Correct word choice
when
less
people Change the quantifier
fewer
consider
renting a cruise ship. Between 2010 to 2013, Wrong verb form
considered
this
figure had gone up from 0.25 to 1.5 millions
at a stable rate. Change to singular
million
However
, it had
Verb problem
apply
level
off Wrong verb form
levelled
from
2013 and Change preposition
in
eventually
it had a slight decrease. Add a comma
eventually,
Nevertheless
, the number went back to 1.5 million.Submitted by annaipsw13 on
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