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the graph below shows information the kinds of food that teenagers in Australia enjoyed eating

the graph below shows information the kinds of food that teenagers in Australia enjoyed eating
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The line graph illustrates data from the years
of
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1975 to 2000 regarding the types of fast food meals that teens in Australia
prefered
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preferred
 eating.
Overall
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, pizza and humbergures consumption
sinificantly
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significantly
 increased overime. The consumption
fish
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of fish
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 and chips
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however
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, however
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, showed a dramatic
decreased
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decrease
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 over the given period.
The fish
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Fish
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 and chips
was
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were
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 the highest meal consumed in the country
during
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from
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the
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1975 to 1985
,
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 and had reached its picked
at
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in
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 1975 with 100 meal
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order
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orders
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.
The
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 following five
yeasrs
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years
 the
order
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 of
this
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 dish began to slighly decrease, and next five years the consumption of
this
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 meal rosed a little with
meal
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meals
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 eaten during
Linking Words
this
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these
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 10
year
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years
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 estimated to be between 82 to 90.
However
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, the
order
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 of
this
Linking Words
 meal is
dramaticly
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dramatically
 decrease to be the
least
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last
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 meal
order
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 with less than 40 orders during the year
of
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2000. The pizza
,
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 was the lowest meal consumed among the three during
the
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1975 with nearly 5 orders. The ordering of
this
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 meal
significanly
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significantly
 changed to reach about 82 orders in 1995 and stayed the same until 2000.
While
Linking Words
,
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 the
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hamburger
humburger
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humburger has
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been
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was
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 the second lowest
order
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 in 1975, it
becomed
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became
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 the most
orderd
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ordered
 meal during 1995 and 2000 to
reached
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reach
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a
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apply
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100
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order
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orders
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 a year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words order with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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