the graph below shows information the kinds of food that teenagers in Australia enjoyed eating

the graph below shows information the kinds of food that teenagers in Australia enjoyed eating
The line graph illustrates data from the years
of
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1975 to 2000 regarding the types of fast food meals that teens in Australia
prefered
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preferred
eating.
Overall
, pizza and humbergures consumption
sinificantly
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significantly
increased overime. The consumption
fish
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of fish
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and chips
however
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, showed a dramatic
decreased
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over the given period.
The fish
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and chips
was
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the highest meal consumed in the country
during
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from
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the
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1975 to 1985
,
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and had reached its picked
at
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in
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1975 with 100 meal
order
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orders
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.
The
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following five
yeasrs
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years
the
order
of
this
dish began to slighly decrease, and next five years the consumption of
this
meal rosed a little with
meal
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meals
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eaten during
this
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these
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10
year
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years
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estimated to be between 82 to 90.
However
, the
order
of
this
meal is
dramaticly
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dramatically
decrease to be the
least
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last
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meal
order
with less than 40 orders during the year
of
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2000. The pizza
,
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was the lowest meal consumed among the three during
the
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1975 with nearly 5 orders. The ordering of
this
meal
significanly
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significantly
changed to reach about 82 orders in 1995 and stayed the same until 2000.
While
,
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the
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hamburger
humburger
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humburger has
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been
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was
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the second lowest
order
in 1975, it
becomed
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became
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the most
orderd
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ordered
meal during 1995 and 2000 to
reached
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reach
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a
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100
order
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orders
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a year.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words order with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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