The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart compares the
amount
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number
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of citizens living in
cities
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in four areas in
Asian
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Asia
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over 50 years from 1970 and gives predictions for
next
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the next
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period in 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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there was an upward trend in the percentage of the population living in urban areas of four countries.
Additionally
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, Malaysia experienced a significant urbanization. Looking at the chart, in 1970 there was 13%
Indonesian
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of Indonesian
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living in
cities
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.
This
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figure quickly
increase
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increased
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to under 30% in 2000 and dramatically rose to over
a
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apply
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half of
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overall
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the overall
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population in 2020. The urbanization speed in
this
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area was predicted
growing up
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to grow
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remarkably in
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a 20-years
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20-years
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20-year
period
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then
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and then
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, stood at about 60%
people
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of people
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in
cities
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.
This
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figure in Thailand witnessed a slight increase. Stood at 19% people in 1970, the amount of
Thai's
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Thai
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citizen
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citizens
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in
cities
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rose gradually in
these
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the
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next years. And
then
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, some believe that
this
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figure could climb to roughly 50% in 2040. Regarding
Philipines
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the Philipines
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, over 30%
Philipino
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of the population
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lived in
cities
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in 1970.
This
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number had a fluctuation over
30-year
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a 30-year
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period , from 32% people in 1980 to 45% ones in 2010. It was predicted
increase
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to increase
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steadily and peaked under 60% in 2040.
While
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,
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apply
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Malaysia showed a huge growth in the population. From 30%
Malaysian
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of Malaysian
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living in
cities
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,
this
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number increased
countinously
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continuously
to 75% in 2020 and
climb
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climbed
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up to 83% in 2040 by prediction.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words cities with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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