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The diagram below show the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below show the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
#show #floor #plan #library #years #summaries #information #feature #comparisons
The below diagram
show
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shows
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 the difference
of
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between
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 public
library before
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libraries
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 20 years
before
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ago
show examples
 and now how
was
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apply
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the display of
library
 nowadays.The main thing difference recently is
computer
Add an article
a computer
the computer
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room
,cafe,lecture
room
,
storytelling
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and storytelling
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 events. First of
all
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all,
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 if we look at the chart before twenty years
library
have
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had
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 4 rooms and 1 hall.Fisrt
room
 includes
cds
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CDs
,videos,
computer
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and computer
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 games at the top of adult fiction books
with
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apply
show examples
in
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On
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 the right side
also
have
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apply
show examples
a
room
 for
a
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apply
show examples
children's books near
to
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apply
show examples
adult non-fiction books. At the
center
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centre
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 portion of the
library
 there
as
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apply
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a 2
table
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tables
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 and 16 chairs near
to
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apply
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the entrance.
Furthermore
,
in
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on
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 the right side of the entrance there
as
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is
show examples
a
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an
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 enquiry desk
room
 and
with
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on
show examples
 the left side there
as
Correct your spelling
is
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 a reading
room
. But nowadays, there are many changes in
central
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the central
a central
show examples
library
 but the main is the indication of
rooms
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room
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 setting changes like the
installat
Correct your spelling
installed
 computers in the replacement of reading rooms
also
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and also
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make
Wrong verb form
making
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 a tea
room
 for the people in the area of
enquiry
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the enquiry
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 desk.
Moreover
,
the
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they
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remove
Wrong verb form
removed
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 the chairs and tables from the centre of
library
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the library
show examples
. Everything in the
library
change
Correct subject-verb agreement
changes
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 without entrance
are
Verb problem
and is
show examples
 the same in both. In conclusion, recently
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
big changes came in the
library
 from the past like
computer
Correct article usage
a computer
show examples
room
, cafe, lecture
room
also
 a tables and chair setting area.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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