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The diagram below show the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below show the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
The below diagram
show
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shows
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 the difference
of
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between
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 public
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library before
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libraries
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 20 years
before
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ago
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 and now how
was
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apply
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the display of
library
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 nowadays.The main thing difference recently is
computer
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a computer
the computer
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room
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,cafe,lecture
room
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,
storytelling
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and storytelling
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 events. First of
all
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all,
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 if we look at the chart before twenty years
library
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have
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had
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 4 rooms and 1 hall.Fisrt
room
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 includes
cds
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CDs
,videos,
computer
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and computer
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 games at the top of adult fiction books
with
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apply
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in
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On
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 the right side
also
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have
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apply
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a
room
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 for
a
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apply
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children's books near
to
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apply
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adult non-fiction books. At the
center
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centre
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 portion of the
library
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 there
as
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apply
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a 2
table
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tables
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 and 16 chairs near
to
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apply
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the entrance.
Furthermore
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,
in
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on
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 the right side of the entrance there
as
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is
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a
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an
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 enquiry desk
room
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 and
with
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on
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 the left side there
as
Correct your spelling
is
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 a reading
room
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. But nowadays, there are many changes in
central
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the central
a central
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library
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 but the main is the indication of
rooms
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room
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 setting changes like the
installat
Correct your spelling
installed
 computers in the replacement of reading rooms
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also
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and also
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make
Wrong verb form
making
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 a tea
room
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 for the people in the area of
enquiry
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the enquiry
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 desk.
Moreover
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,
the
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they
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remove
Wrong verb form
removed
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 the chairs and tables from the centre of
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library
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the library
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. Everything in the
library
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change
Correct subject-verb agreement
changes
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 without entrance
are
Verb problem
and is
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 the same in both. In conclusion, recently
a
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apply
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big changes came in the
library
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 from the past like
computer
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a computer
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room
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, cafe, lecture
room
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also
Linking Words
 a tables and chair setting area.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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