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Some people agree with spending lots of money on weedings ? What is your opinion .

#people #lots #money #weedings
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Marriage is
one
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 of the most important events in everyone's
life
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 and
people
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 usually celebrate it in a memorable way.
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, some
people
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 spend a good amount of
money
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 on
weddings
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while
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 others disagree with
this
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idea
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 because they are more focused on spending
money
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 on other events. I believe,
people
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 should spend
money
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 on
weddings
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.
To begin
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 with, there are a few moments in everyone's
life
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 which are special and marriage is
one
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 of them.
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, many
people
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 plan their wedding finances in advance so they can save and spend
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 amount of
money
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 during their wedding.
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, a huge amount of
money
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 was spent by my friend's father on his wedding as he planned the finances in advance. Even though he saved the
money
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, he took a loan from the bank to plan an exceptional wedding.
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, I agree with the
idea
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 of spending
money
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 but not to
such
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 an extent. On the other side, there are other
people
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 who avoid spending a lot of
money
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 on
this
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 occasion. There can be multiple reasons behind it but most
people
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 plan to save that
money
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 for something better as they don't consider a wedding as an important
life
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 event.
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, my professor arranged a court marriage where no
one
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 was invited except the witnesses.
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,
this
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made
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 a negative impact on his personal
life
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.
To conclude
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, In my opinion, spending
money
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 on
weddings
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 is a good
idea
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 as it is an important event.
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, spending without any limit or financial planning is a bad
idea
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.
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,
one
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 should never run away from spending
money
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 on
weddings
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.
Submitted by tirththakkar23 on

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Language use
Consider using a variety of complex sentence structures and sophisticated vocabulary to improve your writing style and make your argument more compelling.
Structure
You've structured your essay well, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This enhances readability and overall impact.
Content
Your essay provides a balanced view on spending money on weddings, evaluating both sides of the argument before reaching a logical conclusion. This demonstrates an effective task response.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Extravagant
  • Ostentatious
  • Nuptial
  • Matrimony
  • Austerity
  • Sustainability
  • Inebtedness
  • Economically viable
  • Customary
  • Affluence
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