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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting tha main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting tha main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The below diagram shows the difference between public libraries 20 years ago and now how
the
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they
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 display of
library
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 nowadays.The main thing difference recently is the computer
room
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,cafe,lecture
room
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,and storytelling events. First of all, if we look at the chart
before
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twenty years
library
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 had 4 rooms and 1 hall.
Fisrt
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First
room
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 includes CDs,videos,and computer games at the top of adult fiction books On the right side
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also
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 a
room
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 for children's books near adult non-fiction books. At the centre portion of the
library
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 there a 2 tables and 16 chairs near the entrance.
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, on the right side of the
entrance
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 there is an enquiry desk
room
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 and on the left
side
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 there is a reading
room
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. But nowadays, there are many
changes
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 in the central
library
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 but the main is the indication of
room
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 setting
changes
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 like the installed computers in the replacement of reading rooms and
also
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 making a tea
room
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 for the people in the area of the enquiry desk.
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, they removed the chairs and tables from the centre of the
library
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. Everything in the
library
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changes
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 without entrance and is the same in both. In conclusion, recently big
changes
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 came in the
library
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 from the past like a computer
room
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, cafe, lecture
room
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also
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 a tables and chair setting area.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, room, changes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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