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Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language, because some students don't have a natural ability for languages. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Nowadays, school
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 gradually changing to meet the needs of globalisation.
Introduction
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 of foreign
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 is one of them.
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, many people consider
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a positive development and a few individuals are
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 opponents.
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 my viewpoint it is a good
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decision
 and we all should support it. The reasons to back my stance are elaborated in the following paragraphs.
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 with, those who opine that it is a negative approach
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 that It will be an extra burden on the students. In fact, pupils are already under immense pressure to learn subjects like Maths, Science etc. and they do not have extra time and capacity to learn global
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 efficiently. To illustrate, many schools in metropolitan cities have tried teaching foreign linguistics but they failed to achieve
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 results.
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, we must not uselessly put extra burden on young ones.
On the other hand
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, those who advocate teaching different
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 argue that students will be benefitted out of it. As a matter of fact, if learners
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 to know the language at an early age, they can master it through
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in their free time.
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, it is seen that young minds are good learners and they can remember things taught at an early age for a long time.
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, reading other
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 beneficial for children and can help them in their career. Adding more to it,
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 activity can
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 to be a stress buster for pupils. Indeed, students usually feel exhausted by reading conventional subjects
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.
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, learning foreign
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 can break
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 chain and can be used as a fun activity.
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, can be used to freshen the young one's minds.
To sum up
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, it is right to say that teaching other tongues can increase children's workload but it can broaden their
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 and can relieve
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 stress of reading regular subjects.
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