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The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and in the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summerise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and in the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summerise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates
about
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people in three different
income
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 classes spending on petrol in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom
ans
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and
United
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the United
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 States of America .
Overall
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, In
United
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the United
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 Kingdom
poorest
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the poorest
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class
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 are more
favorable
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likely
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 to buy petrol .
In contrast
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,
Richest
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the Richest
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class
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 in
United
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the United
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 States of
American
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America
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 are the most
favorable
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favourable
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class
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 to spend money to buy
pertrol
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petrol
. At the peak
by
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of
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 5.5 % approximately of
poorest
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the poorest
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class
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 in
UK
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the UK
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then
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 the percentage decline gradually in
middle
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the middle
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class
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 about 1.5 % of general
income
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 follows by shape drops to hit the bottom to reach 2% of
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income
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the income
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percent
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per cent
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 in
richest
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the richest
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class
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 . In
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the
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USA in percentage of
income
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 in
poorest
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the poorest
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class
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in
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at
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 the lowest point by less than 1% after
that
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that,
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 it increases significantly in
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the middle
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middle
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middle-income
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income
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 category by 4% more .
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Finally
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Finally,
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 in
richest
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the richest
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class
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 the percentage
is fluctuating
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fluctuates
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 it rises
up
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apply
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to
be
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apply
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almost 4%
then
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drop
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drops
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 down bu almost 1%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, class with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drops" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Petrol expenditure
  • Expenditure trends
  • Spending comparison
  • Fluctuations in expenditure
  • Car dependency
  • Public transportation
  • Seasonal variations
  • Global oil prices
  • Government policies
  • Environmental concerns
  • Fuel tax
  • Spending habits
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