The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's corree and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's corree and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the
hapits
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habits
of people who buy or drink
coffee
and tea in five different Australian cities over the
last
week.
Overall
,
citizins
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citizens
who went to a cafe' for
coffee
or tea, had the highest
persentage
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percentage
in all the cities except for
Adelaide
for the
last
4 weeks.
Although
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, people who
brought
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bought
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fresh
coffee
had the
least
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lowest
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percent
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percentage
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,
while
individuals who bought instant
coffee
were in between. In Hobart, Sydney and Melbourne the
persentage
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percentage
of people who went to a cafe' were just above 60
percent
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per cent
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,
while
in Brisban and
Adelaide
, they
where
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were
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around 55
percent
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per cent
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and 40
percent
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per cent
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respectively. The percentage of citizens who bought instant
coffee
in the
last
4 weeks
were
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was
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around 42
percent
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per cent
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in
both
Sydney and Melbourne,
while
they reached around 33
percent
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per cent
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in
both
Brisban and
Adelaide
,
Moreover
, they reached just below 40
percent
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per cent
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in Hobart. Individuals who bought instant
coffee
in
both
Hobart and Brisban were around 53
percent
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per cent
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,
while
in
Adelaide
they reached up to 50
percent
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per cent
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,and they were below 50
percent
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per cent
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in
both
Sydney and Melbourne.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, adelaide, percent, both with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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