Nowadays many young people are going to other countries for their future. What are the reasons for it? How it will be in 30 years?
In the present, many
youth
are willing to go to other countries to search for their luck, such
as career
or Correct article usage
a career
education
. One of possible
reasons why Add an article
the possible
this
trend can be happen
because their original Change the verb form
happen
country
can not provide what the youth's
needs, Change noun form
youth
such
as job fields. I predict that 30 years later, this
thing will significantly increase. I will elaborate it
below.
First Change preposition
on it
thing
Fix the agreement mistake
things
first,
people
go to study or work abroad because their first country
could not give what
the young Correct pronoun usage
them what
people'
Change noun form
people
needs
. Correct subject-verb agreement
need
For example
, in my own country
, in Indonesia
it is very hard to find a job that Add a comma
Indonesia,
linked
with our major or qualification. So, Add a missing verb
is linked
people
at
here decided to search Change preposition
apply
jobs
Change preposition
for jobs
from
another Change preposition
in
country
. Not only that,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
the quality of education
in Indonesia is not really that good. To pursue a good quality of higher education
, they tend to apply for scholarship
. Fix the agreement mistake
scholarships
Therefore
, they can get a better education
. In other words
, the role of the country
itself is really important for youth
whether theywill
have Correct your spelling
they will
career
in their Add an article
a career
country
or in another state.
Based on this
explanation. I believe that people
will more
and more interested to out Add a missing verb
be more
from
their Change preposition
of
country
for their future. This
is due to
people
think
if they are going to another Wrong verb form
thinking
country
, there will be a lot of opportunity to take. To illustrate, they can have a job that linear
with their capabilities. By Add a missing verb
is linear
this
, they can gain higher incomes. So that, people
will more engage to going abroad.
To conclude
, inability
of a Add an article
the inability
country
to fulfill
Change the spelling
fulfil
their
citizen's needs make young Correct pronoun usage
its
people
want to leave their country
. They are eager to looking
for a better life in other countries. Because of that, in the future, it is inevitable that the number of Change the verb
look
people
are
going abroad Unnecessary verb
apply
more
Verb problem
will be
high
. But, as long as the government of the Replace the word
higher
country
can take responsibility to
Change preposition
for
this
, it is still possible to make youth
to
stay in the Fix the infinitive
apply
country
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