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The maps below show the development of George town between 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the development of George town between 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate the substantial changes in the landscape and the development taking place in
town
, called George
town
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Town
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 between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
,it can be seen that
George
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George's
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town
 had changed from
undeveloped
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an undeveloped
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town
 into a growing
city
. In 1990,most of the area was blank space with a few buildings.The
city
 centre was located at the main centre with
local
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the local
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 market at the western
side
 and
bus
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the bus
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 station
at
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on
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 the north-western
side
.The northern
side
 of
town
 was
city
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the city
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town
 hall
along with
park
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a park
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 located at the eastern
side
 of the building.The road
was took
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 place along the port connecting both sides of the
town
. In 2010,Significant changes took place since many structures
was
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were
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 changed and constructed.
For example
,there were restaurants
and
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apply
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bars and clubs next to the port.The road was changed to
pedestal
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the pedestal
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.The
city
 centre remained at the central part of the
town
 with a railway and a new bus station connecting it to the
city
town
 hall.The park was replaced with a new shopping
center
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centre
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 and housing areas located
at
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on
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 the southern
side
.
While on
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On
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 the western
side
,
bus
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the bus
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 station and local market were converted to
apartment
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an apartment
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 complex and supermarket.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, city, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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