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Band 7.5

A friend from another coutry moving to your city for work. he asked you to advise about living in your city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter 1. suggest an interesting part of the city to live in. 2. describe the public transport in your city. 3. say how your friend can meet new people there.

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Dear Skylar, How have you been? I'm so excited to see you. First of all, congratulations on your new job and welcome to Canada. I'm currently living in Vancouver which is a big
city
 with ample facilities. Downtown is the main sub-
city
 in Vancouver and it is a quite pleasant place to live since it's surrounded by international restaurants, shopping malls and grocery stores. The public transportation system in my
city
 is very active and works on time. You can always check the arrival and departure time online before even coming to the bus stop.
This
 will help you to save your time and energy.
Also
, you can use the metro train services which arrive every 3 minutes at the train station. As you know, Vancouver is a multi-cultural
city
 with different ethnicities. You can easily find friends in community events organized by the
city
 council every Saturday. Most people around the
city
 come to these events to support the local community in the area. I hope
this
 information will help you to make
further
 decisions on your journey. I can't wait to hear from you. Yours sincerely, Sandie
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task achievement
To further improve your letter, provide a brief comparison of different parts of the city and elaborate more on why you specifically recommend downtown. This will give a clearer view to your friend.
coherence cohesion
For even better coherence, consider using more linking phrases to connect the ideas between paragraphs smoothly. For example, 'In addition to this,' or 'Furthermore,' will enhance the flow.
task achievement
The letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is very suitable for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph is well-focused on a single idea, making it easy to follow.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately used, making the letter personal and engaging.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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