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For countries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and math. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be mande as a fourth skill to be added to the list. To what extent do you agree.

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Introduction
for governments, there are three significant parts of education
such
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development
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tecnology
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technology
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believe
computer
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 skills should be the fourth
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 them and might be the most important in the
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modern
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Nowdays
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 almost everything
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connects
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computer
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the computer
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 so you must have
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 you can ues. all of us
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use
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computer
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computers
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 when
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COVID-19
 made us stay
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 home and work, study and play and
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 us how
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 to live.
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the
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second
 thing, is computers make life
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easier
 and better in many ways
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,
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working
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 and even to
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organise
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 use my
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 to see emails from the
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college
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 need to, like
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last
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week
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 send them my sick leave and that
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 the going to them in
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college
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Conclusion
overall
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,
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computer
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the computer
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 is a gift and we must learn how to
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use
 it and teach,
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educate
every one
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everyone
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want
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 to.

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task achievement
Try to elaborate more on your main points. Offering more detailed examples or explanations can help strengthen your argument.
task achievement
Work on improving your grammar and spelling. For instance, 'tecnology' should be 'technology' and 'computer skills nessery' should be 'computer skills are necessary'.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion to frame your arguments. This structure can help the reader follow your points more easily.
coherence cohesion
Aim for a more logical flow between your paragraphs. Use linking words like 'firstly,' 'furthermore,' or 'in addition' to connect your ideas more seamlessly.
coherence cohesion
Practice your punctuation and capitalization, such as starting sentences with capital letters and using commas appropriately.
task achievement
The essay addresses the prompt by discussing the importance of computer skills in modern education, which is essential for task response.
task achievement
Your argument is clear: computer skills are valuable and necessary in today's world.
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The examples you provided, such as the impact of COVID-19 and using computers for work and study, are relevant and help strengthen your argument.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Baseline requirement
  • Niche advantage
  • Curriculums
  • Socioeconomic backgrounds
  • The digital divide
  • Educational equity
  • Integrating
  • Enrich traditional lessons
  • Engaging
  • Effective
  • Core educational curriculums
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