The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the distribution of
British
immgrants
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immigrants
in five different countries from 2004 to 2007 .
Overall
, it is evident that
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in the year 2006 the most popular destination for the
British
was Australia,
Whereas
the least was New Zealand. at first glance , it is obvious that a significant majority of
British
individuals preferred to emigrate to Australia in 2006 comprising just over half of the population .
Additionally
, the number of
British
people moving to Australia started at just over 40% in 2004 and
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to around 45% in 2007.
Moreover
, the percentage of
Britsh
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communities moving
oversea
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to Spain declined steadily from just below 35% in the beginning to nearly 30 per cent.
On the other hand
, The USA shows
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of fluctuation
throughtout
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throughout
the period.
However
, France experienced a massive resurgence to the high point of about 33% in the year 2005. before receding to just under 20% in 2007 .
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