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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. The amount spent is in hundred thousand pounds. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. The amount spent is in hundred thousand pounds. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and
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A glance at the provided column graph depicts the quantity of expenditure on six
products
 (personal stereos, tennis racquets, perfumes, CDs, toys and photographic film) in four different countries.
Overall
, Brits spent more money in comparison with the other countries on highlighted
products
. In stark contrast, individuals who are from Germany spend the lowest amount of money on these
products
. Photographic films are the most popular goods among the mentioned goods in Britain, France and
also
 Italy.
In addition
, over a staggering 160 thousand pounds was spent in Britain and France on photographic films.
Although
 a significant amount of money that French, British and Italian spent on toys, films, and CDs, Germans merely spent approximately 140 thousand pounds on these. it is noticeable that all
products
 follow a similar trend that Britain is the first in terms of expenditure. The lower budget can be seen
thatrelated
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as related
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 to the personal stereos and tennis racquets.
Furthermore
, none of the
mentionedcountries
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mentioned countries
 could not reach 160 thousand pounds.
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