The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009.
The table depicts the distribution of students that attended four different types of Secondary school
among
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three years, 2000, 2005 and 2009.
Overall
, throughout the given period, it can be seen that the percentage of pupils in Community
schools
increased,
whereas
it decreased in Grammar, Voluntary-controlled and
Specialist
schools
. With regards to Community
schools
, the proportion of pupils was the lowest
along with
Specialist
schools
at 12% each in 2000. After 5 years,
this
number increased significantly up to 32% and
then
to over half of the distribution at 58% in 2009.
On the other hand
, Voluntary-controlled
schools
fostered over half the number of students at 52% in 2000,
while
Specialist
and Grammar
schools
carried 12% and 24%, respectively. In the following years, the proportion of students in
Specialist
schools
had a slight drop to 11%,
whereas
there was a significant drop in Grammar and Voluntary-controlled
schools
to 12% and 20%, respectively.
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