The pie chart shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during 1990s. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during 1990s. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the global
degradation
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of agricultural
land
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worldwide which was driven by three main
factors
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. The table shows the three affected
regions
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by the causes in the 1990s. When considered together, there is no correlation between the two sets of data. Globally, there are four main causes of unproductive
land
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, including overgrazing at 35%,
deforestation
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at 30%,
over-cultivation
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at 28%, and other
factors
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at 7%.
However
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, these four
factors
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do not directly affect the
land
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in the three
regions
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. First,
land
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degradation
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was caused by different
factors
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in some
regions
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. In Europe,
deforestation
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was the leading factor responsible for the total
land
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degraded at 23% with 9.8%
deforestation
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, followed by
over-cultivation
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at 7.7%, and over-grazing had a small contribution at 5.5%. In Oceania, over-grazing was the most significant cause of
land
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degradation
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, affecting by11.3%,
while
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deforestation
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had a minor impact at 1.7%.
Over-cultivation
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did not contribute to
land
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degradation
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in
this
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region, resulting in a total
degradation
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of 13%. North America had less unproductive
land
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with a total of 5%.
Over-cultivation
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had the largest impact at 3.3%,
while
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over-grazing caused 1.5%, and
deforestation
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was less significant at 0.2% of
degradation
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.
Overall
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, over-grazing and
deforestation
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were the leading causes of
land
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degradation
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globally, but have varied significantly across different
regions
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words degradation, land, factors, regions, deforestation, over-cultivation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • agricultural land
  • productivity
  • geographical focus
  • leading causes
  • diminished
  • significant factors
  • impact
  • prevalent
  • statistics
  • trend
  • usage
  • unexpected findings
  • agricultural practices
  • environmental conditions
  • pie chart
  • table
  • regions
  • 1990s
  • summarize
  • report
  • main features
  • comparisons
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