The map shows the comparison of changes in the library before and after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The map shows the comparison of changes in the library before and after five years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
There is a map comparing some changes in the
library
in five
years
. Through the five
years
, it can be seen that there are no differences in the entrance area.
Also
, the Librarian's desk and the stairs remain the same. The map shows that there were 8 small tables in the middle of the
library
five
years
ago. Now, it can be seen that there are 4 longer tables in the same spot. It can be said that there are many differences between the book sections. There were only three sections, which are self-help, history and fiction on the left. The new
library
has more sections including the old one. Kitchen, economics, and law are the new categories added in 5
years
.
Moreover
, on the north side, there is an area for the children with some books for their ages. Before the renovation, newspapers and periodicals were on the right side of the
library
. After that, they were digitalised and became films and DVDs.
Also
, with
the
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technological development, some computers were added to the
library
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words library, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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