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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (COz) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (COz) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart presents information about the
number
 of average carbon dioxide emissions per human in four nations namely
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Unit kingdom
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United Kingdom
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, Sweden , Italy and Portugal
form
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from
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the year
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year
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years
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 1967 to 2007.
Overall
, the most significant features
about
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this
 graph are that both Italy and
Sweden
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Sweden's
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averaged
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number
 went up
while
 other countries went down respectively.
To begin
 with
United
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the United
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 Kingdom the figure
of
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 carbon dioxide emissions per person stated
by
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10.7 metric tons in the
year
 1967
afterthat
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after that
 the
number
 declined to 9
in
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at
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 the end of the period ,
On the other
hand
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 Sweden was at 8.5 approximately in the
year
 1967 next 10 years the average jumped to highest recorded above 10
mertic
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metric
 tonnes followed by sharp fall . In
year
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the year
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 1967
average
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the average
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levels
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level
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 of
the
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gas in Portugal was below 1 afterwards the
number
included
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increased
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 to almost 5.5
metric
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 per tonne
at the end
 of the period ,
As well as
 Italy the
number
 was above 4
metric
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 per tonne at the beginning of the time
then
 the figure rose to be around 8.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions
  • per capita
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • industrialization
  • environmental policy
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • climate change
  • mitigation efforts
  • emission levels
  • comparison
  • decade
  • environmental impact
  • greenhouse gases
  • sustainable development
  • regulatory measures
  • technological advancements
  • energy consumption
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