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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the transition of CO2
emissions
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 per
person
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 in four European states from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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, the United Kingdom and
Sweden
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 showed downward trends
whereas
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 the amount of CO2
emissions
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 per
person
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 in Italy and Portugal moderately rose throughout the period.
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 it had the largest CO2
emissions
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 in 1967 with approximately 11t per
person
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, the United Kingdom experienced a consistent decline in CO2
emissions
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, reaching around 9t in 2007.
Nonetheless
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, the figure
of
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for
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 the UK remained
as
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apply
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the highest. The CO2
emissions
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 of
Sweden
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, after witnessing a sharp increase, fell significantly and stood at just less than 6t per
person
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 in 2007. The CO2
emissions
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 of Italy was 4t per
person
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 in 1967.
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, the number rose considerably, surpassing that of
Sweden
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 by 1997 with almost 8t and plateaued afterwards. Portugal, which had the least amount of CO2
emissions
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 in 1967 with less than 2t, showed an enormous upward trend in the given period, reaching the number of
Sweden
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 by 2007 with around 6t per
person
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "nonetheless".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words co, emissions, person, sweden, t with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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