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Despite better access to education, many adults today still cannot read or write. In what ways are they disadvantaged? What can governments do to help them?

#access #education #adults #governments
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introduction conclusion present
Ensure there is a clear introduction and conclusion. Your essay starts with a question about education's impact rather than directly addressing the topic of adult illiteracy.
relevant specific examples
Provide specific examples to illustrate the disadvantages faced by illiterate adults and how government interventions could help. This will strengthen your argument.
clear comprehensive ideas
Improve sentence structure and grammar to make your ideas clearer. Pay attention to punctuation and avoid run-on sentences.
supported main points
You have touched on important points like the impact of illiteracy on daily life and the role of government in providing education to adults.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy
  • Underemployment
  • Social isolation
  • Healthcare decisions
  • Autonomy
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Marginalized areas
  • Economic instability
  • Employment opportunities
  • Governmental plans
  • Dependency
  • Community involvement
  • Financial incentives
  • Flexible schedules
  • Mobile applications
  • Workplace literacy programs
  • Literacy education
  • Access to information
  • Social interactions
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