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The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The line graph displays
proportions
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the proportions
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 of the United Kingdom's
population
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 watching the TV or listening to the
radio
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 station during various
time
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 intervals on an average
day
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 in December
,
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 1992.
Overall
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,
although
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 both media platforms experience fluctuation in the number of
audience
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 during the
day
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, it is evident that
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TV is more popular amongst the UK
population
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 compared to the
radio
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. To commence, the television has significantly
less
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fewer
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audience
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 numbers in the morning.
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, watching
rates
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 start to increase
after noon
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afternoon
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. The television is outstandingly more popular amongst the UK
population
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 compared to the
radio
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, as it peaks at approximately 8 pm, with just below half of the
population
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 watching around that
time
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, far exceeding the
rates
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 of the
radio
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 during the same
time
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. The TV dominates over the
radio
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 for almost most of the
day
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time
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, as it surges after noon and levels out with the
radio
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 just after 2 am after midnight.
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, the
radio
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 is mostly popular during the
day
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, specifically from 6 am to slightly after 12 pm. The
audience
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rates
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 of the
radio
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 climax at around 8 am, reaching
approximatly
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approximately
 28% of the UK residents.
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, the
radio
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 remains less widespread, as
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television dominates the
audience
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rates
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 for the rest of the
day
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, radio, time, day, audience, rates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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