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Homework is a part of school life. Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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school
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compulsary
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compulsory
 at every education facility from children
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problematic
 in a
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 life. on the one
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homework
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 being given daily which is given on the purpose that the
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students
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students are not able to
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adapt
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 the concept of
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doing
homework
everyday
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 till now. Students are getting more
homework
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it is taking more of
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 play time which makes them
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frustrated
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Sometimes
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students
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 are unable to complete the assignment since not every
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 personality or flexible which makes them completely exchusted and takes as forced to
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 it which
neither
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 good for anyone. on
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another
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The parents
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 that giving
homework
 is good and beneficial
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whereas
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 most parents
agrees
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 since it would help them in life,
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the future
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 or whatever.
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Add a conclusion: The essay lacks a conclusion to summarize the key points and provide a final opinion. This is essential for a complete response.
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Balance both views: While both sides of the argument are mentioned, they need to be balanced more effectively with equal emphasis on the opposing viewpoints.
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The essay attempts to discuss both viewpoints, which is a key requirement of the task.
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The topic of homework and its impact on students is clearly understood.

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